托福相当于英语几级？

       写作范文

　　Introduction

　　Paraphrase的简单技巧：把题目给出的句子的宾语挪至主语位置 → Technologies – computers and smart phones as the typical – have occupied our children’s time. As a result, too many of our children stay in the indoors or stare at the screens all day long, ← 强烈暗示本文的立场 and seldom do we see that they play simple toys, such as the LEGO or jigsaw puzzles, or that they play outdoors with their peers. This is a pity.

　　Body

　　论证套路：承认我的反方可能的advantage → The opponents may try to convince parents and teachers of the benefits of video games in promoting children’s intellectual development. They may make the case that the complexity of the games– the designs or plots–spurs thinking. Admittedly, in many of the games, children may need to think vigorously to comprehend the intricate relationships between the characters, and this may be when their intelligence develops. 同时发现这个advantage对应的disadvantage → However, a complicated story of a game may have few blanks, and children are therefore deprived of the opportunity to use their imagination. 这个disadvantage对应着我方的advantage → In fact, the imaginative mind is stimulated when children play simple toys. For example, children, with their imagination and creativity unrestrained, may use the LEGO blocks to build a great variety of things. They may construct a hospital, a fire station, a motorcycle, or aircraft that no one else could think about.

　　福利：“驳论”是GRE写作的具体指令要求之一。

　　论证套路：考虑我的反方可能持有的观点或采用的说辞 → To dispel the anxiety of many parents, proponents of modern technologies may argue that the games and devices will not disable children’s emotional or social functions because the social contexts created by the technology are highly similar to the real-life situations. 同时发现这个说辞的flaw → At this point, could those concerned parents be convinced? They may not be. (措辞技巧：设问，语气强于陈述。) There remains a criticaldiscrepancy between the virtual context and the real one. 举例去illustrate这个critical discrepancy → For example, many children are found to have the dysfunction in their interaction with people who are physically present (定语从句有强调定语的作用), particularly when the people are the opposite sex. 这个critical flaw对应着我方的advantage → In fact, it is only when children are physically together with their peersthat their emotion and sociability develop properly. The outdoor play time in which children are physically present creates the chance for the emotions to be communicated, understood and exchanged without the screen as the obstacle or masque. Having the chance is essential in children’s emotional development.

　　福利：“驳论”是GRE写作的具体指令要求之一。

　　如果有三个理由，那么两大(篇幅长)一小(篇幅小)，或者两小(篇幅小)一大(篇幅长)。In addition, although technology enables children to exercise indoors, outdoor activities are more desirable/preferable, because the ceilings and walls confine children. The outdoor is the best playground for children to act out their wills, desires, and ideas.

　　Conclusion

　　Fortunately, today can be just like the old times, because the LEGO and jigsaw puzzles are still available. For better development of the brain and of the character, children should play simple toys or be outside with their friends.

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　　.9.21（上午） 独立写作题目

　　“The town government has got some money to develop a ground.

　　Do you think that the ground should be developed to a garden that everyone in the town can enjoy, or a sports field for the students in the high school who don’t have one?”

　　写作范文

　　If my city council wants to hear my idea, I will suggest that the money is used to build a sports field for the teenagers who do not have one on their school campus. ← 完全可以用口头陈述的方式来开头一篇托福独立写作。当话题就是很everyday topic的时候，不要刻意“拔高”题目的立意，不要让措辞太“严肃”，从而失去“话语感”。 Under the circumstance that some local high schools do not have a sports field for their teenage students, the public garden for all residents, albeit a good idea, is less important.

　　The field is needed because the field will be a proper place for exercise and sports activities and also because teens need the place where their redundant energy can be consumed, which would otherwise be used to do silly things. ← 并列的原因状语从句作为段落中心句的核心。 First of all, without the shared sports field, teens who do not have a playground on the school campus will never have good P.E. classes, without which their physical development may be in trouble. This is the simplest reason yet the most important one. ← “反证法”：如果没有什么就出现什么“恶果”。 Second, if there is no such a place, where they can spend their time and energy doing meaningful activities, some teens may hang out in the streets and idle their time away doing stupid things.  ← 依然是“反证法”：如果没有什么就出现什么“恶果”。 This sounds alarming yet does happen. Many cases of juvenile delinquency would not happen if the energetic juveniles could have a place to let go of their energy through playing basketball or soccer.

　　让步后置 → Admittedly, the garden seems to be a fair option as it would be provided for all of the residents rather than for a small group of them. Some people may never take a walk in the garden, and they may still want to have a share of it. Others may come up with a number of ideas about the benefits of having the garden, such as a landscape that elevates the environment of the town, a public space where people meet and know their fellow residents during the morning jog or theirwandering on weekends. 让步后一定要质疑和反驳→ However, will the garden be made full use of? How many of the town’s residents have the habit of morning jog or jog in the garden? How many of them would stroll in the garden rather than visit the town’s mall or wouldn’t they prefer to have a chat in a café over a cup of coffee?  ← 并列的多个反问句来质疑/挑战让步的内容。 And to elevate the town’s atmosphere, the council may have a number of alternative ways that would not require such a large and complete space. For example, planting trees or growing flowers on the sidewalks of streets can also well afforest the town.

　　At this point,  we should be convinced that ← 引导总结的内容时，不是仅有in conclusion/to sum up之类的短语 compared with the lack of a proper playground for the town’s adolescent youths, theelevation of the environment or having a public space is not so significant. Not to mention that the likely rare use of the garden or lesser need for the it.

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