TPO 12 Conversation 1

　　Student：So Professor Tibets, your notes said that you want to see me about my heavy-weight paper. I have to say that grade wasn’t what I was expecting. I thought I’d done a pretty good job.

　　Professor：Oh, you did. But do you really want to settle for pretty good when you can do something very good?

　　Student：You think it can be very good?

　　Professor：Absolutely!

　　Student：Would that mean you’d…I could get a better grade?

　　Professor：Oh, sorry! It’s not for your grade. It's…I think you could learn a lot by revising it.

　　Student：You mean, rewrite the whole thing? I really swamped. There’re deadlines wherever I turn and… and I don’t really know how much time I could give it.

　　Professor：Well, it is a busy time, with spring break coming up next week. It’s your call.But I think with all a little extra effort, you could really turn this into a fine essay.

　　Student ：No… yeah…I mean, after I read your comments, I...I can see how it tries to do too much.

　　Professor：Yeah. It’s just too ambitious for the scope of the assignment.

　　Student：So I should cut out the historical part?

　　Professor：Yes. I would just stick to the topic. Anything unrelated to the use of nature EMITRY has no place in the paper. All that tangential material just distracted from the main argument.

　　Student：Yeah, I never know how much to include. You know…where to draw the line?

　　Professor：Tell me about it! All writers struggled without one. But it’s something you can learn. That will become more clear with practice. But I think if you just cut out the…emm…

　　Student：The stuff about history, but if I cut out those sections, won’t it be too short?

　　Professor：Well, better a short well-structured paper than a long paper that poorly-structured and wanders off topic.

　　Student：So all I have to do is to leave those sections?

　　Professor：Well, not so fast. After you cut out those sections, you’ll have to go back and revise the rest, to see how it all fits together. And of course, you’ll have to revise the introduction too, to accurately describe what you do in the body of the paper. But that shouldn’t be too difficult. Just remember to keep the discussion focused. Do you think you can get it to me by noon tomorrow?

　　Student：Wow…emm…I have so much…er…but I’ll try.

　　Professor：OK, good! Do try! But if you can’t, well, sure for after spring break, OK?

　　《对话》

　　学生：Tibets教授，你的评语写说要跟我见面谈谈那篇大部头的论文。我必须说，那个分数实在低于我的预期。我以为我写的还不错呢。

　　教授：噢，你确实写的不错。但你愿意在明明可以做到“非常好”的情况下仅仅做到“比较好吗”?

　　学生：你觉得它可以达到非常好?

　　教授：当然!

　　学生：这是否意味着，你 我可以得到一个更好的成绩吗?

　　教授：噢，抱歉!这不是为了你的成绩。是我觉得你如果修订一下它，会得到很多收获。

　　学生：你的意思是，把原文重写一遍?我被各种(作业的)截至线压得忙不过来。我真的不知道我能(为这篇论文)付出多少时间。

　　教授：现在正是忙碌的时候，加上下周春假要来了。由你决定。但我觉得如果付出一点额外的努力，你会把它变成一篇很好的文章。

　　学生：不 嗯，我的意思是，读完你的评论，我能明白这篇文章写的有点过。

　　教授：对。在作业的范畴里，它有点太急功近利了。

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　　学生：所以我应该删掉历史的部分?

　　教授：是的。我希望你扣紧主题。任何跟自然意向的使用这个主题无关的内容都不要在论文中出现。所有这些相关材料都分散了主要内容的注意力。

　　学生：是的，我非常明白应该包括多少内容。你知道 在什么情况下适可而止?

　　教授：就是这样。所有作者如果不能把握这个，都会遇到困难。但你能学到一些东西。这在实践中会更加清晰。但是我觉得如果你能去掉，嗯

　　学生：历史的东西。但如果我把这部分删掉，会不会太短了?

　　教授：一个短小精悍、结构优秀的论文总好过结构混乱而又离题的长篇大论。

　　学生：所以我要做的就是把那些部分都抛开?

　　教授：没那么快。在你删掉那些部分之后，你要回到文章其他部分，看看它们通不通顺。而且当然，你要重写前言部分，来准确地描述你论文的主体。但那应该不难。就记住你的讨论要集中力量在重点上。你觉得你明天中午之前能交给我吗?

　　学生：啊 我有那么多(事情要做呢)，嗯 我尽力吧。

　　教授：好的!试试看吧!但如果你赶不出来，春假之后一定交上来吧?

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